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| G. Whittaker 3-2012 |
Sunday, October 28, 2012
A Bone to Pick
We have an extensive paper coming up in my English class on the book Winter's Bone that I have been blogging about recently. Following is my draft thesis paragraph for this assignment.
Winter’s Bone by Daniel Woodrell
is a complex story that delves into the world of small town methamphetamine use
and gives the reader a view from inside the situation. Through the story of Ree Dolly, readers learn
about Woodrell’s own life growing up in the Ozarks. A
picture is painted of the situation through the eyes of someone who is fighting
to survive in that world, and who is deeply affected by methamphetamine, but
who is not a user. The tale of survival may be a fictional one, but the themes included in the book relate deeply to Woodrell's experience, and to the very real epidemic of small town meth use.
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I think that you started off very well, but you didnt give alot of details to catch my attention,also i couldnt really tell what your thesis was about, you just stated what the story was about not really what the essay was based on.
ReplyDeleteI liked this. Short and simple and to the point. I like how you write "a picture is painted". That kind of wording is something that is different and draws an audience in. I feel like with reading your blogs throughout the semester that you're paper will be really well written.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great start! I really like that you give the readers a visual by saying that Ree is fighting this battle although she is not a user which really indicates her willingness to get out of a bad situation that was forced upon her. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI couldn’t have said it better. You got right to the point. I didn’t know if "A picture is painted of the situation through the eyes of someone who is fighting to survive in that world, and who is deeply affected by methamphetamine, but who is not a user" was your hook but I felt like it captured my eyes. I like your thesis but I wanted to see what you were going to write about not just what the book was about. Overall you had a great post !
ReplyDeleteYour summary is straightforward, without any extra information, and your thesis is clear and precise. Also, as someone who is obsessed with grammar, I must say that yours was the only one that I didn't cringe at when reading it, or just stop reading altogether because my head was going to explode. If the rest of your paper follows along with this paragraph, I would definitely be interested in reading it.
ReplyDeleteI see what you're getting at, and it's very well worded. The only thing that I don't see is a strong claim. I realize that some of the content will be abstract; and there will have to be some interpretation to relate the book's events to the author's life. Your thesis just doesn't present an arguable interpretation, it's more stating -what I see as- facts.
ReplyDeleteI think it is well written, but the thesis is too vague to truly understand what you are getting at. I can point out a thesis but I don't know what you are going to write your paper on really. But I know I will later!
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the input! My paper is now completed, but I'm going to wait to blog it until after the due date. :)
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